tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post6685805301684574650..comments2024-01-14T06:06:09.220-06:00Comments on Boricua in Texas: MelanophobiaUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-68190977276897558792007-09-24T06:07:00.000-05:002007-09-24T06:07:00.000-05:00Loved the imagery with the bird - thanks for addin...Loved the imagery with the bird - thanks for adding the photo so I didn't have to disappear further into cyber space to find it!Jodi Cleghornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00808676742258881407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-91923939772421551572007-09-23T13:06:00.000-05:002007-09-23T13:06:00.000-05:00I like crows...I like crows...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-41478299040410519652007-09-22T00:43:00.000-05:002007-09-22T00:43:00.000-05:00okay, I got goosebumps from that! Very well writt...okay, I got goosebumps from that! Very well written!SuseADoodlehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02203027336864059578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-51203082852313891082007-09-21T23:53:00.000-05:002007-09-21T23:53:00.000-05:00Wow! An eerie tale - not much to edit in this one....Wow! An eerie tale - not much to edit in this one. Love it!Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-65872622440768797002007-09-21T18:50:00.000-05:002007-09-21T18:50:00.000-05:00Thanks, Paul. I always enjoy your stories very mu...Thanks, Paul. I always enjoy your stories very much. I am glad you liked mine.Boricua in Texashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10408201125366918838noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-36691185766928726232007-09-21T18:43:00.000-05:002007-09-21T18:43:00.000-05:00I love that, Maria!pjd, thanks for the comments. Y...I love that, Maria!<BR/><BR/>pjd, thanks for the comments. You always have very useful advice. I actually did a quick read and noticed one verb tense that was wrong, so I revised it.Boricua in Texashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10408201125366918838noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-67691316181149714232007-09-21T17:38:00.000-05:002007-09-21T17:38:00.000-05:00By halfway through, you can tell where this is goi...By halfway through, you can tell where this is going, but you don't care because it's so well written and the appearance of the bird at the end is well done. For me, this works on a lot of levels. I think you need to work on tense changes here and there, but the story itself and some of the language you use is compelling.PJDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028687955957107957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-3634522906988249292007-09-21T16:53:00.000-05:002007-09-21T16:53:00.000-05:00I think that would make an excellent short film......I think that would make an excellent short film....I mean, can't you just picture it all and hear the music as the bird comes into view over and over?Mariahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05049511202014141182noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-75650658613580874002007-09-21T13:04:00.000-05:002007-09-21T13:04:00.000-05:00Thanks for the feedback, guys! I am quite partial...Thanks for the feedback, guys! I am quite partial to this story. Yesterday I spent some time thinking of the challenge and what NOT to write about (my claustrophobia, which is the most common type of phobia). I was stumped, and then it came to me on this fly early this morning.Boricua in Texashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10408201125366918838noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-67210743280651910912007-09-21T12:06:00.000-05:002007-09-21T12:06:00.000-05:00YIKES! Good story!! Gave me goosebumps! Great expl...YIKES! Good story!! Gave me goosebumps! Great explanation for a phobia too!josie2shoeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15452791371126155173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-68198734346147397022007-09-21T11:27:00.000-05:002007-09-21T11:27:00.000-05:00A very deep and cryptic story. RosexoA very deep and cryptic story. <BR/><BR/>Rose<BR/><BR/>xoAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-16317209654773728482007-09-21T10:19:00.000-05:002007-09-21T10:19:00.000-05:00Got a good Macabre theme underlying here. BravoGot a good Macabre theme underlying here. BravoRic Vinhagehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15029838462695086904noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-42588147247375718942007-09-21T08:24:00.000-05:002007-09-21T08:24:00.000-05:00oh ingrid... that was wonderful.. i saw the whole ...oh ingrid... that was wonderful.. i saw the whole thing... you did a great job on that!!!!!!!paisleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08231453820728399262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-37084648.post-68119835024394641772007-09-21T07:36:00.000-05:002007-09-21T07:36:00.000-05:00Oooh, creepy; well written, well done.Oooh, creepy; well written, well done.Johttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15149139820474072721noreply@blogger.com