Monday, June 25, 2007

Hack job, a trite dialogue

Below is my first attempt at writing a story where the dialogue comes from song lyrics:

SHE: So much for your promises. They died the day you let me go.

HE: Will you listen to my story? It'll just be a minute. How can I explain?

SHE: Mmm, what you say? Mm, that you only meant well? Well, of course you did.

HE: You caught me in a lie, I have no alibi

SHE: How stupid could I be? A simpleton could see that you’re no good for me.

HE: I'm sorry, I'm sorry.

SHE: You said you’d die for me

HE: Let's start over.

SHE: There's no excuse. No explanation.

HE: I wish you'd unclench your fists and unpack your suitcase

SHE: Caught up in a web of lies.

HE: I never really wanted you to see the screwed up side of me that I keep locked inside of me so deep

SHE: Excuse me, too busy you're writing a tragedy

HE: (I was doing so well) Can we just be friends?

SHE: Give me something to believe in, cause I don't believe in you anymore, anymore…

HE: Lately there's been too much of this, but don't think it's too late

SHE: I wonder if it even makes a difference to try.

HE: Is this the way it's really going down? Is this how we say goodbye?

SHE: I can’t make you love me if you don’t.

HE: Believe me, if I could undo what I did wrong I'd give away all that I own

SHE: You don't care a bit. You don't care a bit. You don't care a bit. You don't care a bit. You don't care a bit.

HE: All the words that I come up with, they're like gasoline on flames

SHE: The words you say don't have a meaning

HE: I’ll try to do it right this time around.

SHE: Forgive sounds good. Forget, I’m not sure I could.

HE: It's not the time to break up this love. Keep it together now. It's not the time to break.

SHE: How the hell did we wind up like this?

HE: Someday, somehow I'm gonna make it all right but not right now.

SHE: So this is goodbye.

HE: Oh, no!

Songs quoted:

1- Hide and seek, Imogen Heap
2- Shattered dreams, Johnny Hates Jazz
3- It’s not over, Daughtry
4- Makes me wonder, Maroon 5
5- Stupid, Sarah McLachlan
6- Southern Central Rain (I'm Sorry), R.E.M.
7- Someday, Nickelback
8- Cold, Crossfade
9- The Walk, Imogen Heap
10- I can’t make you love me, Bonnie Raitt
11- I’m not ready to make nice, The Dixie Chicks
12- Breakdown, Daughtry


  1. Powerful!! This must have taken you a lot of time! Very moving.

  2. holy cow girl. How creative and cool! You go girl! :)